If you want some serious, analytical criticism, here goes. I'd have a light crescendo just before the piano comes in, this lets it herald the second section a little. Or, if you prefer to go for a different sound, you can diminuendo or keep it as it is, but add a high, quiet synth backing during the second part that plays long, held chords, purely for texture. The three lowest notes in the piano part (the ascending scale of the tonic minor augmented 7th) should also have some dynamic contrast between each one, depending on what sound you're going for. If the emphasis is on the first note, then it would be nice for the other two notes to fade away slightly; this also makes the top melody project better. If the phrase is meant to be more lyrical, and the lower notes of the piano part are to flow into the higher melody, there's nothing wrong with introducing the first note quietly, then having a crescendo until the climax of the phrase, wherever you want that to be. Hope this helps.